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Which sentence in the passage should be revised for wordiness?

You have probably heard someone say that breakfast is the most important meal of the day. This statement is true. Liz Fair field reports in Perfect Health magazine, "Breakfast helps your body to get going so that you have plenty of energy to start the day.” However, researchers warn against starting the day with foods that are high in calories, sugar, and fat. In other words, eating a piece of toast, either plain, with butter, or with peanut butter and with a side of fresh fruit, such as a banana, a plum, or an apple, for breakfast is better than eating doughnuts, candy, or ice cream. Not eating a healthy breakfast can cause iron deficiency, which can cause a person to have a high body mass index (BMI) and lead to obesity.

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  • Answer:

    The sentence that should be revised for wordiness is "In other words, eating a piece of toast, either plain, with butter, or with peanut butter and with a side of fresh fruit, such as a banana, a plum, or an apple, for breakfast is better than eating doughnuts, candy, or ice cream."

    Explanation:

    Wordiness means taking longer than what is necessary to get to the point. It happens when we use redundant expressions or simply when we use too many words. That is precisely the case in the sentence above. There are too many words, too many foods, being cited to get to the point. Just a couple of examples would suffice to make it clear that caloric foods are not the best option for breakfast.

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